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Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« on: November 15, 2009, 04:42:51 PM »
So, for my AP English class we had a simple assignment to make a sonnet, set to a certain style etc. I chose to do mine on parkour. I'm a visual artist as some of you may know, so don't expect this to be stunning haha. I'd love to hear your feedback though, hope you enjoy it!

                              Flow

Sprinting towards the concrete barrier, ready to defeat it swiftly
I focus on my target, closing in with every stride.
Focus, I tell myself again, I must do this quickly,
As I vault the monstrosity in a graceful, precise glide.

No time to catch my breath, I must keep moving.
A wall is in the distance, unmoved by my decision.
I waste no time, kicking off the battered wall, proving
Myself, and moving upwards grabbing the edge, with utmost precision.

Climbing over the wall and sprinting, I see a rail.
I think to myself, this will be an easy run.
I go to vault it effortlessly, but I miserably fail.
A slip of the foot, and I ruined the fun.

Rising up, blood trickling down my arm from the feat,
I walk away content, but with a sense of defeat.
Current 1 Rep Maxes:
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Deadlift: 375    Goal: 415
Squat: 280       Goal: 315

Total: 905 lbs     Goal: 1030lbs

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Re: Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« Reply #1 on: November 16, 2009, 09:21:35 AM »
I like it! It might benefit from a little work, and if I had more time I would take a closer look, but it looks good to me.
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Re: Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« Reply #2 on: November 16, 2009, 02:28:18 PM »
Good, though I personally have a thing against rhyming.
I am not an authority on poetry so, critiquing would be rude and unhelpful. It isn't for me to say.

As long as you are happy with it. Really, that is all that matters.
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Re: Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« Reply #3 on: November 16, 2009, 03:33:03 PM »
Good, though I personally have a thing against rhyming.
I am not an authority on poetry so, critiquing would be rude and unhelpful. It isn't for me to say.

As long as you are happy with it. Really, that is all that matters.
Likewise, it was out of my control though, it had to follow the Shakespearean style in terms of rhyme scheme and what not. Thanks though, i appreciate it.
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Deadlift: 375    Goal: 415
Squat: 280       Goal: 315

Total: 905 lbs     Goal: 1030lbs

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Re: Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« Reply #4 on: November 16, 2009, 03:49:00 PM »
Well for a forced ruled poem it is good.
I bet it would be so much better if you could do whatever you want.

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Re: Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« Reply #5 on: November 16, 2009, 05:42:51 PM »
I like it but if it wasn't forced then I'm sure it would be so much better. :) But still I really enjoyed it.
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Re: Flow- A Sonnet on Parkour
« Reply #6 on: November 21, 2009, 12:58:48 PM »
thats pretty cool man,  really liked it. A+ hahah :)
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